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Friday, 18 June 2010

Stamping Out!



I will suffer painfully..
To gainfully elevate myself..
From spiralling down with gravity..
These roads of smoky casket..

While I sit,..
Twitching, twitching, itching..
I tell myself, I am not addicted..
To the poof..

Yet my blood boils, with adrenaline..
Demanding to be made calm..
By the poof, poof..

Like a primate in a cage..
I beat my chest restlessly, relentlessly..
To be let go,..
Allow the poof to serve its purpose..
Of giving me the ahh feeling..

Ahh to my death bed..
Of breathless breath..
Choking, clogged up, on the ahh..
Of yesterdays poof..

So I will suffer painfully..
To gainfully relief myself...
With elevation from the ahh..


Ahh  poof, poof of casket beds..
I am not to be deceived..
By the craves lust of the grave..
No more, no more..

Posted by Kodjo Deynoo at 16:23
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14 comments:

  1. Brian Miller13 March 2011 at 11:13

    nice. i like the poofs and the ahs, would make for great fun in the reading...and i am glad you end in hope...

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  2. dustus13 March 2011 at 14:10

    I like the sound effects (onomatopoeia0, the smoky casket, and introduction of the primate simile. The positive spin at the end works well. Nice challenge response.

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  3. Claudia13 March 2011 at 14:11

    ha - i like the poofs..would love to hear you read this..

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  4. Steve Isaak17 March 2011 at 23:14

    Good piece, good flow, all that. Solid work.

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  5. Anonymous31 July 2011 at 00:52

    I like the poem. 27 days free today of the evil habit.

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  6. Tess Kincaid30 December 2012 at 14:37

    I love the lyrical use of "poof"...very nice...

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  7. Helen30 December 2012 at 14:53

    I like everything about this poem .... Happy New Year!!

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  8. Gail30 December 2012 at 18:27

    I agree with Helen...I like everything.

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  9. The Blog of Bee30 December 2012 at 19:45

    Thank God I gave it up - poor, proof! Well done.

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  10. Other Mary30 December 2012 at 23:17

    Ahh...a very good description of addiction.

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  11. hyperCRYPTICal31 December 2012 at 09:52

    Well done.

    Anna :o]

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  12. Carrie Van Horn31 December 2012 at 15:03

    It is a powerful addiction for sure....great lines here Kodjo!!

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  13. Wayne Pitchko1 January 2013 at 05:38

    smokin good one KD...thanks for sharing your words

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  14. Judy Roney6 January 2013 at 03:03

    I am taken in by your words and descriptions. Such a powerful look at a powerful drug.

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