For now I am just trying
To keep my head above waters, "walk through"
I am swimming, floating, holding onto faith
Avoidance of obstacles on dersert lands, prickly
Grey on my bare foot, "best try"
Marking passage on my foot path
I am red clothed, red blood
Ready a' willing to face the Red mist, "fire flame"
This is my way of staying clear
Off titanic faithless, I have to make it
Of iceberg I stay clear off, "I try to"
Unwanted troubles, they spiral,
Many beneath waters "unseen"
Shore line
Spells my saving grace
Fearful it stands
In the foot steps of mirage, "I pray not"
This is the assault course
Of life before making hay, on desert walk
This is resolution's take, "on 40 days"
This is the pledge on my honour
To make it through the red mist
Shore line / Spells my saving grace / Fearful it stands / In the foot steps of mirage, "I pray not"
ReplyDeleteGreat sense of rhythm to your lines that works well with the questioning, sense of spiritual journey aspect of your poem. Way to respond to the challenge, Kodjo!
Trying to keep my head above water. I think we are all trying to keep our heads above water. Nice poem.
ReplyDeletethis is such a wonderfully crafted piece.. good take!
ReplyDeletei absolutely love how you start this..For now I am just trying.. makes a great entry to take the reader on this path of questions and thoughts..
ReplyDeleteThe Waters always invite mystery and deeper thoughts and questions don't they? You hit it here.
ReplyDelete'unwanted troubles, they spiral' so true, stay clear!! I enjoyed this...and thought provoking :)
ReplyDeleteI am swimming, floating, holding onto faith...to make it through the red midst - Great intro and ending lines that sum up the details in between very nicely. Good take on the photo - your verse plays well with the image.
ReplyDelete'this is the pledge ob my honor'
ReplyDeletea super last line
oops, sorry "of"
ReplyDeleteThis is my way of staying clear
ReplyDeleteOff titanic faithless, I have to make it
Of iceberg I stay clear off, "I try to"
Unwanted troubles, they spiral,
Many beneath waters "unseen"
so many beneath waters "unseen" ... all any of us can do is try.
Beautiful!
This is so precious piece.
ReplyDeleteYou’ve got superb talent in creative writing,
ReplyDeleteKeep it up.
Please check out short story slam week 10 prompt today.
It is great to write and entertain our children,
Don’t you agree?
Give it a try,
Let your beautiful imagination fly.
Best.
Happy Autumn!
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