Sitting alone listening to the silence ;
You see me, mirror says, I messed my life up
and found me in the process, rebirth, new me
and the critics, stand back with amazement,
write off, like I was, never made
to amount to much, much I
do, much I did, brought
tears in rain wash,
many men, cursed
to, see
the
back
of me,
talk of me,
like I was the
end game, see me done,
see me done now, write off,
good riddance, they took my file, and
burnt it, faders, ashes, to be made of
me. Being through hell and back, I paid the
price , phoenix, me that, now I step, foot steps left
in ashes, watch germination, shooting stars penetrate through, the ozone,
layer, to make an entry, with burns on
the back of the doubters, doubt this, new
era and I say no sorry, nada,
regrets nada, this is life lessons
and it made me stronger
made me stranger, green
lantern and to
the observers
thinking
blown
off
thinking
blown
off
thinking
blown
off
sad and powerful, perfect shape.
ReplyDeleteI really like this - it had an interesting flow, kind of made me feel like how my when I'm writing - it kind of comes and goes in waves of quick thoughts and drawn out thoughts, all mingling together but disjointed. I liked it alot, especially the "shape" of the poem - it really guides the reader through a littler journey. Thank you for sharing :)
ReplyDeletePowerful and compelling. I love the way you put a concrete form to the stanza's.
ReplyDeleteamazing one, well done.
ReplyDeleteVery powerful and very sad write. Well done.
ReplyDeleteMelanie
Moving, deep and utterly captivating. A great read.
ReplyDeletebrilliant, this is impressive.
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