I beg not to be labelled
I beg not to be taught this
Be labelled and presented as a form
Of a form, in a form
I beg not to be taught this
Essence, drained of blood and of life
Essence, drained of blood and of life
Drunk by the critics, without feel
On the butchers table, drunk by the critics
Boxed and presented in genre of pigeon holes
On the butchers table, drunk by the critics
Boxed and presented in genre of pigeon holes
Drunk by the critics, without feel
I beg not to be labelled
Boxed and presented in genre of pigeon holes
And claim to know where my thoughts lie
And claim to know where my thoughts lie
I beg not to be labelled,
Not to be read, by those without soul
And claim to know where my thoughts lie
They will taint my handy work
They will taint my handy work
Not to be read, by those without soul
Emotions that burst out in knowing, feeling
They will taint my handy work
So I beg not to be labelled, by the critics
So I beg not to be labelled, by the critics
Emotions that burst out in knowing, feeling
A connection no man can explain
So I beg not to be labelled, by the critics
No, not even I can, be allowed to, label
No, not even I can, be allowed to, label
A connection no man can explain
Presume to know your interpretation
No, not even I can, be allowed to, label
This is my gift to your kind
This is my gift to your kind
Presume to know your interpretation
But to be felt and shared, loved
But to be felt and shared, loved
This is my gift to your kind
To understand with no need on emphasis
To understand with no need on emphasis
But to be felt and shared
So I beg not to be labelled
To understand with no need on emphasis
Who spats out false prophecy
So I beg not to be labelled
So I beg not to be labelled
Of knowing, by the soulless
Who spats out false prophecy
I beg not to be labelled
Who spats out false prophecy
I beg not to be labelled
dude...you took this and ran...form is so hard for me...as would be being pigeon holed or labeled or put in a box...ha...a nice life lesson, but also apropo to my trying this form lol
ReplyDeleteI know how you feel...
ReplyDelete~laurie
Interesting poem:)
ReplyDeleteAs a poem this is really great - as a pantoum, IMO, can't be called one. You did repeat the lines but! you didn't repeat the correct ones in the correct order (which I think I would list as a necessity)..then you didn't rhyme ABAB or even ABAB CDCD EFEF etc to the last stanza although you did end on the line you began on.
ReplyDeleteSo not quite a pantoum. That's ok...remember my sestina was not quite a sestina, so try it again when you're of a mind. With this one or maybe another topic. This poem stands alone as a good poem, but not really a pantoum, I don't think.
very interesting - I've not seen such a long pantoum before - kudos for taking the form and running with it to create this poem
ReplyDeleteyou really devised an effective poem with a emotive message that is emphasised by the pontoum -
ReplyDeleteYou obviously had a lot of fun with this, and it was fun to read.
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